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Here is the set of corrections:
Sincerely,
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Here is the set of corrections:
Here things are getting more balance, after my cousin’s death was sad, mix up emotions all together was almost 7 days after Margaret’s birthday he passed way.
BETTER: Here things are getting more balanceD. After my cousin’s death it was a sad time, with mixed up emotions all together. He passed away almost 7 days after Margaret’s birthday.
He was a very nice person, I am still can believe that after 20 years I had the opportunity to see him.
BETTER: remember the period at the end of an idea.
He was a very nice person. I still can't believe that after 20 years I had one last opportunity to see him before he died.
(I think you mean that you had a chance to see him before he died?)
I am very glad for the good time we had together with tia Nana.
And that is life we live the present we don’t know the future, the best we can do the best memories we leave when we have to go.
BETTER: And that is life. We live in the present, we don’t know the future, and the best we can do is to leave the best memories when we have to go.
That is why is always good to do your best in anything you do.
BETTER: That is why it is always good to do your best in anything you do.
My father use to tell that all the time no matter what you do do your best, I agree with him and setting up good exemplos for the youngsters, like Mary and Frank is so sad the they miss their mommy terrible and I can’t bring her back is not a day that they don”t suffer.
BETTER: My father useD to tell me that all the time: No matter what you do, do your best. I agree with him and I'm setting good examples for the youngsters, like Mary and Frank. It is so sad that they miss their mommy terribly and I can’t bring her back. There is not a day that they don”t suffer.
And I feel even more for Frank because he thinks is his fault because he did wish for her death in some circunstanceas.
BETTER: And I feel even more for Frank because he thinks it is his fault because he wished for her death in some circumstances.
I told him is not his fault his mommy was sick that’s why she did what she did but she was a wonderful person that unfortunalty addictions leaded her to the end.
BETTER: I told him that it is not his fault and that his mommy was sick. That’s why she did what she did but she was a wonderful person but unfortunately addictions led her to the end.
Anyways life is short is a mission that we all have now to rise them give good directions and love them.
BETTER: Anyways life is short. It is a mission that we all have now to raise them give good directions and love them.
GRAMMAR
we raise our children
the sun will rise
the price of gasoline will RISE next year.
the oil companies will RAISE the price of gasoline.
RISE when the thing goes up by itself
RAISE when we do the action to something.
Today was 5 de maio and Christy invited us for tacos but I already had dinner kids had also but they want to go with her and help.
BETTER: Today was 5 de Mayo (in Mexico) and Christy invited us for tacos but I already had dinner, kids had dinner, too, but they wanted to go with her and help.
They went to publix first with her and Thomas and them they got free cokkies chocolate chips oh boy they love that, I don’t know why we don’t have in Brasil not even penaut butter.
BETTER: They went to Publix first with her and Thomas and theN they got free chocolate chip cookies -- oh boy, they love that. I don’t know why we don’t have them in Brasil. We don't even have peanut butter.
Well and lovely Christy told them they could pick up a mother’s day card for me and they helped Thomas get one for her.
BETTER: Well, and lovely Christy told them they could pick up a Mother’s Day card for me and they helped Thomas get one for her.
Was 8:30 I texted her asking to send them back home, because was getting late and I had to help them to take a shower was a interesting shower let is put like that.
Do you know why I think water heater broke but thank to God the electrical stove works to boil some water.
BETTER: At 8:30 I texted her, asking her to send them back home, because it was getting late and I had to help them to take a shower. It was a interesting shower, let me put it like that.
Do you know why I think water heater broke but thank to God the electrical stove works to boil some water.
BETTER: Do you know why? I think the water heater broke, but (thanks to God) the electrical stove worked to boil some water.
Many people say, "Thank Goodness" or "Thank God"
They had a blast taking shower with a mug nice and warm I told them that is what I had to do in Brasil when I was pregnant, for 3 months but tell what was alwyas a pleasure I never complain .
BETTER: They had a blast taking shower with a nice and warm mug. I told them that this is what I had to do in Brasil when I was pregnant for 3 months, but I told that that it was always a pleasure and that I never complained .
Sometimes are things that happen in our lives to make as a better person is that make any sense?
But honestly sometimes I think I can’t take anymore and I talk to my self and say stop winning Claudia still could be worse move on do something productive!
BETTER: Sometimes there are things that happen in our lives to make us a better person. Does that make any sense?
But honestly sometimes I think I can’t take anymore and I talk to myself and say, "Stop whining, Claudia! It still could be worse! Move on, do something productive!"
GRAMMAR you can say this in three ways
BETTER: Sometimes there are things that happen in our lives that make us a better person.
BETTER: Sometimes things that happen in our lives make us a better person is that make any sense?
BETTER: Sometimes things happen in our lives to make us a better person
And is life we can’t be complain about things we have to became better so we can acomplash what we want and not let negativities or lack of effort to still from us our dream.
BETTER: And is life we can’t be complain about things. We have to became better so we can acComplish what we want and not let negativities or lack of effort to steal from us our dream.
Because the only one’s can be blame for not to get were we want is ourself I know sometimes is hurd to admite but we are responsable for what whe desire and life can be easier and have more pleasure and more oportunites if we fight for and is very nice to be able to help others financially also are so many people that could use a help a start point but for that someone need to do their part in the roll of life.
BETTER: Because the only one who can be blamed for not getting where we want to go is ourself. I know sometimes it is hard to admit, but we are responsible for what we desire and life can be easier and have more pleasure and more opportunities if we fight for others. It is very nice to be able to help others financially, and also there are so many people that could use some help. That's a starting point, but for that someone needs to do their part in the role of life.
We all have a purpuse in life so let’s make sure we help each other the best way possible.
BETTER: We all have a purpose in life, so let’s make sure we help each other the best way possible.
I hope you still happy and eating less butter.
BETTER: I hope you are still happy and that you are eating less butter.
Remenber Remember that all the taste good and is enjoyble most the time is not good for your health so choose wise for anything that you give to your body.
BETTER: Remember that everything that tastes good and is enjoyable most of the time is not good for your health, so choose wisely about anything that you give to your body.
(NICE INSTRUCTION)
Your body is your sacred body you never want hurt and your teeth are include they are your pearls and you want to take care everything that you take care it last longer.
BETTER: Your body is your sacred body. You never want to hurt yourself and your teeth are includeD. They are your pearls and you want to take care of them. Everything that you take care of will last longer.
It is so realistic can be a car can be your teeth can be a wife or husband once things aren,t being polish stars a litlle crysp, rough.
BETTER: It is so realistic. The thing can be a car, it can be your teeth, it can be a wife or husband. Once things aren't being polished, they start to get a little crust, which is rough.
Sorry for all this writing I love writing to you and get excite for a feed back.
BETTER: Sorry for all this writing. I love writing to you and I get exciteD about feedback.
I love you so much God bess you and your guardian angel will protect in that journey.
Sincerely,
mom with a big heart!!!
(only one change. Remember... one idea per sentence. then a period.)
BETTER: I love you so much. God bless you and your guardian angel will protect you in that journey.
Sincerely,
mom with a big heart!!!
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Here things are getting more balance, after my cousin’s death was sad, mix up emotions all together was almost 7 days after Margaret’s birthday he passed way.He was a very nice person, I am still can believe that after 20 years I had the opportunity to see him.I am very glad for the good time we had together with tia Nana.And that is life we live the present we don’t know the future, the best we can do the best memories we leave when we have to go.That is why is always good to do your best in anything you do.My father use to tell that all the time no matter what you do do your best, I agree with him and setting up good exemplos for the youngsters, like Mary and Frank is so sad the they miss their mommy terrible and I can’t bring her back is not a day that they don”t suffer.And I feel even more for Frank because he thinks is his fault because he did wish for her death in some circunstanceas.I told him is not his fault his mommy was sick that’s why she did what she did but she was a wonderful person that unfortunalty addictions leaded her to the end.Anyways life is short is a mission that we all have now to rise them give good directions and love them.Today was 5 de maio and Christy invited us for tacos but I already had dinner kids had also but they want to go with her and help.They went to publix first with her and Thomas and them they got free cokkies chocolate chips oh boy they love that, I don’t know why we don’t have in Brasil not even penaut butter.Well and lovely Christy told them they could pick up a mother’s day card for me and they helped Thomas get one for her.Was 8:30 I texted her asking to send them back home, because was getting late and I had to help them to take a shower was a interesting shower let is put like that.Do you know why I think water heater broke but thank to God the electrical stove works to boil some water.They had a blast taking shower with a mug nice and warm I told them that is what I had to do in Brasil when I was pregnant, for 3 months but tell what was alwyas a pleasure I never complain .Sometimes are things that happen in our lives to make as a better person is that make any sense?But honestly sometimes I think I can’t take anymore and I talk to my self and say stop winning Claudia still could be worse move on do something productive!And is life we can’t be complain about things we have to became better so we can acomplash what we want and not let negativities or lack of effort to still from us our dream.Because the only one’s can be blame for not to get were we want is ourself I know sometimes is hurd to admite but we are responsable for what whe desire and life can be easier and have more pleasure and more oportunites if we fight for and is very nice to be able to help others financially also are so many people that could use a help a start point but for that someone need to do their part in the roll of life.We all have a purpuse in life so let’s make sure we help each other the best way possible.I hope you still happy and eating less butter.Remenber that all the taste good and is enjoyble most the time is not good for your health so choose wise for anything that you give to your body.Your body is your sacred body you never want hurt and your teeth are include they are your pearls and you want to take care everything that you take care it last longer.It is so realistic can be a car can be your teeth can be a wife or husband once things aren,t being polish stars a litlle crysp, rough.Sorry for all this writing I love writing to you and get excite for a feed back.I love you so much God bess you and your guardian angel will protect in that journey.Sincerely,mom with a big heart!!!
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